1.I think my biggest strength in my essay was explaining quotes, I think I explained them very smoothly and gave enough explanation so the quote makes sense. ““Empathy is a spotlight of narrow focus; it shines brightly on those we love and gets dim for those who are different or strange” (Bloom 3).What I think that Bloom means here is that for people we love and are close to we will give out all the empathy they need, but for…
Cadogan has different struggles and challenges in each of the 3 places he has lived in. The first one Kingston he knows the streets very well and knows how to stay out of trouble, but if he wears something like the wrong color in a certain area it will cost him his life. In New Orleans at first he thinks it’s not so bad but then he realizes everyone is looking at him and thinking that he is the crime….
Overall I think I improved from the last peer review. My confidence in reviewing someones essay and figuring out helpful comments to write has definitely improved. This time around I was able to make comments that give helpful feedback like about how sentence structure needs to be fixed or just adding a brief introduction to a topic that doesn’t make much sense. I am now able to give sharp feedback for most of the essay, like adding more explanation for…
Winter is the best season out of the rest since there is the most to do. Multiple sources agree with this statement like skiing or snowboarding. According to a season expert Sam Arangio, ” Skiing and snowboarding makes winter the best season”(10). In other words skiing and snowboarding does not compare to any other sport you can play in other seasons, making winter the bets season. Winter is not just the best because of skiing and snowboarding you also have…
In The limit of friendship the essay analyzes how humans will lack the social needs and social interactions if they keep on track by just using social media and online interactions. One concern that Konnikova states is that some social skills will not develop when so many people are using a lot of online interactions., As Konnikova puts it, Konnikova says here “We aren’t born with full social awareness,and Dunbar fears that too much virtual interaction may subvert that education”…
This speech was about how your life has value and what you can do to make your life have value. One Main argument he had was talking about how your degree has human value, he talked about how every choice you make can affect your life value. He also talks about an example with believing in god and not and saying the same experience can have 2 different meanings for different people, he states that an atheist does not exist…
1.Social media has negative impacts on in person connections and spreads hate throughout the world. Overall I think my thesis statement was pretty strong, it gave a good overview of what I was going to say in my essay. One thing I would say I could improve on is maybe making my thesis a tiny bit longer, but I definitely think I did a pretty good job on thesis since I was able to connect many points that proved my…
Overall this article was a lot about how empathy can be a different thing in peoples minds. The first topic the author talks about is how empathy can be easier to come across if you are really close to the person you are getting empathy from the author even says “its far easier to empathize with those who are close to us”. The author also says that for some people a white person talking to a white person about empathy…
Paragraph without Naysayer: Arguments on twitter and engaging people in a sarcastic way seemed to resonate with Phelps Roper like when she talks with Abitbol about a holiday thats coming up for him and makes fun of the holiday she says “Thats handy with yom kippur coming up!” (Chen 10), she spreads hate through speaking in a sarcastic manner. She seems to only have “fun” when she has a meaningful/sarcastic argument with someone. Like I said earlier when she and…
Overall I think that my experience on a college level peer review was great. I was able to get very solid and helpful feedback on my essay. I got feedback saying that I explained my quotes well and backed it up with valid evidence that revolved around my thesis which was very helpful to know that I did that right. Then I got some feedback saying that I should expand on some of the points I make so that will…
